Recent content by pusser

Sounds familiar! ;^) I think it's OK that it's kinda cliche, overall, but where you can make it interesting is in the side plots, in the pro/antagonists' personality faults, etc. I'll try and give this some thought the next day or two and offer some twists to make the straightforward plot a...

Understood. Thought you were looking for scripting responses. You might find a director/producer in a different forum.

So, we're just to take your word for this....about how great this script (comparable to Kaufman) is? Post some of it here and let us react.

It IS a bit cliche....was just trying to work your existing scenes into a storyline. I'll post something shortly that does the same, but without being so hokey.

http://mixonline.com/basics/recordingtheband/ http://srforums.prosoundweb.com/index.php/f/2/0 A board out will be clean, but may not get as much audience as you'd like, so be sure to get a couple of mics' worth of ambient sound before the show, during and after.

You say you've now figured out most of the narrative, but since I don't know what that narrative says, here's the first thing that came to my mind as I read your set-up and the recommendation not to have him running from the mob. He's running from his life. His wife and daughter were killed in...

Why have you gone ahead and written out some scenes that don't naturally fit into the storyline? I'd write out the storyline first, and then write/expand the scenes with peripheral characters. Hey, but that's me. It's hard for me not to think about the movie ROCK-STAR in this scenario, but...

You might look at the synopses of any of the dozens of road-trip films over the years and see if they give you some ideas. But I think the one you mentioned is fine, or could be modified a bit. You presumably took off with some friends to examine this Christian college. I think that's a good...

I think you could get some quality help on this site.

So how did your love-scene writing go? Recognize that a love-scene does not necessarily mean a s*x-scene.

I'd be up for posting it here and letting everyone have a go.

Don't know that it was "advice"....just some thoughts. You've got some battle scenes....now there just needs to be a reason for them, and a reason for the audience to care for one or more of the soldiers or groups. Let me know if I can help.

OK, here's the synopsis I get from your script: Military Intelligence sends Davis to kill a previously sent platoon which has turned into zombies. Davis enlists the help Ryan and his friend Jesus. At camp, they plan to attack a railroad crossing, but tell the men it's the ammo dump. Davis...

First of all, I'd look at some quality horror films and see what makes them work---even read some on-line reviews and see what makes those films horrific. In the end, it's....fear....the unknown....suspense as to what will eventually happen. There are lots of good examples, but one of the best...

I'll post on your zombie script thread.