my screenplay - please share your thoughts

[cat_oates]

Hiah im new to the site just starting to get the jist of it you might say.
I want people's opinion of the screenplay i've been writing recently.

Basically this couple get engaged and married and the day they leave on honeymoon they find out theyre going to have a baby, however when they go for their first scan there is big trouble and from this im going to have them loose the baby and male is going to die and i plan to have the female going through life as though nothing has changed that hes still there for a week until her sister in law insists she gets on with life and they sort out the funeral and then i was thinking maybes we could have her meet someone else but then feel that its too much for her and shes not ready to move on and she feels she owes it to him not to. Then at the will reading there will be a letter for her saying that he wants her to move on and he knows that she may feel as if no one can compare to him but she has to because he doesnt want her living her life alone and even though hes gone he'll always love her and just wants her to be happy.

what do you all think

i know ive rambled but hey

c.oates

 

[Fallingsunz]

honestly, i feel that i seen it before. there alot of various to that kind of movie. you got to make sure you think to your self the true attention that ppl have. 30 secs and you got in the first ten name your main character. and show the first problem. you got to make it where they can relate too. just some opinion. just feel i seen it before.

 

[casper2289]

Frankly....the story is common...very very common.... but I believe it depends on the treatment. ex. Kramer vs. Kramer starring Dustin Hoffman and Meryil Strip. A very common story about a couple getting seperated and a father-son bond. But it was treated with such refreshment that everyone who saw the movie at once connected. I believe that is what we screenwriters need to do. Give our movies a fresh treatment.

 

[temerson]

The consensus seems to be that this story has been done, and done recently, and done a lot. Question: How old are you? Have you ever been married? Have you ever lost a spouse and a child? If you are younger than, say, 45, I would not tackle this script. If you have never been married and/or lost a child, I would not tackle this script. First, it's a downer. As a new writer, you need to write something that excites people. Secondly, it is a very emotional story, it sounds like. If you do not have experience with these types of emotions, it will be hard for people to accept your story.