critique my film, PLEASE

[bturner]

It's only about 3 min. Please have look. Your comments and ideas will be greatly appreciated. Thanks.


Blake

http://youtube.com/watch?v=nXkk1CoVBSI

 

[jblles]

Blake, you did a very good job. Was this your first short film? Heres my...
-PROS-
*Great cineamatography
*lighting was pretty good
*2:15 to 2:59 was excellent

-Suggestions-
*In the beginning when it shows t & F productions presents then it fades to directed by Blake turner. i personally think it would sound better if you said a film by blake turner
*from the beginning to about 00:57,althought the images were great, some form of music or ambient sounds would have been great, just to keep the viewers interest. when i watched it, it gave me that feeling of watching something on mute
*you maybe could have given the coffee pot scenes a little more light
*3:30 to the end, what was it there for?


Also i was wondering what camera you shot this with and what you edited with. Overall I thought you did an excellent job, keep up the good work

 

[bturner]

jblles,
Thank you for your comments. Yes, this was my first short film. I will go with your idea for 'a film by blake turner'. I agree that the beginning should have sound. while deciding what music i should use, i thought i would put the film on you tube. 3:30 to the end is a mistake. I shot the entire film with a Sony DCR-PC100. Thanks again for your comments and ideas. I am shooting another short. I'll let you know when it's done.

Blake