Short Film script critique?

[robvmonte]

Hello. I have just finished my first script. Its not in any script format, its just a bunch of dialogue. Im trying to make the best possible film I can.

Could you possible look at my script, or just glance at it, and tell me what you think? How can I make it better? Did it make you laugh. Did you like the concept. How can I improve on it?


Thanks in advance for taking the time to read my script.

-Rob

You can read the script here

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http://webspace.ringling.edu/~rfiermo1/Jennifer1.txt