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Narrow Road
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A while back I had this one scene stuck in my head and I couldn't get rid of it. It didn't go to anything, just seemed like a real visual opener. Anyway, I finally sat down one day and wrote it out. Then I just let my "muse" take over and wrote until I ran out of steam. Finally, I set it aside to use someday when I discover the rest of the story.
I just came across these pages again this morning and thought I'd post them here to see what others thought about them. Here goes:
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I just came across these pages again this morning and thought I'd post them here to see what others thought about them. Here goes:
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FADE IN:
EXT. DESERT - DAY
A two-lane highway dividing a vast expanse of sand and
cactus. Heat shimmers can be seen rising from the
pavement as the sun sits high in the sky.
Silent. No signs of life, except for a lizard that
skitters across the hot pavement and disappears in to the
shadow of a cactus.
After a few moments the silence is broken by a low rumble
coming from somewhere beyond the horizon. The sound is
accompanied by a shadow creeping across the sand.
The source of the shadow is discovered as a
UFO
slowly hovers into view...and lands.
It is quickly apparent that this UFO has seen better
days. The black scorch marks and crumpled steel sections
make it clear this is not the best saucer in the fleet.
EXT. UFO - DAY
From somewhere inside the craft can be heard mumbling.
This is followed by the sound of hammering and then a
ramp begins to lower from the bottom of the craft.
The ramp drops to the sand with a thud and a
BODY
is rolled down the ramp. The body appears to be a human
male.
ALIEN (O.C.)
(alien voice, english
subtitles)
You better not screw up again...I can't
survive another hit.
A loud clunking and screeching sound is heard and then an
alien arm reaches down and pulls the ramp up. The ramp
immediately falls down, is pulled up again and hammering
is heard from inside the craft.
As the UFO lifts into the sky, PETER jumps to his feet.
PETER
Come back here, you can't leave me like
this!
The UFO passes back over head and drops a case which hits
Peter on the head, knocking him out cold. The craft then
flies away.
INT. UFO - DAY
The "bridge" of the craft is in complete disarray. There
are papers strewn everywhere, coffee cups are turned over
with coffee stains present on the various instrument
consoles.
Various instrument panels are open exposing the
electronics below. Many rolls of duct tape can be seen
laying around as well.
In the middle of the "bridge" is a
CAPTAIN'S CHAIR
where the PILOT is seated. The Pilot's face is obscured
by a dog-eared book titled, "Flying Saucer, Model IFV
1701, Owner's Manual". In the pilot's other hand is a
hammer and a philip's screwdriver.
PILOT
(extremely frustrated)
Insert the flux transformer into slot
17b, as pictured in Figure 3.2.2 on page
56? There's only 48 pages in this book.
Throws book across "bridge" as a
YELLOW LIGHT
begins flashing and a klaxon begins to sound.
COMPUTER VOICE
(filtered)
Warning! Proximity Danger! Activating
Yellow Alert!
PILOT (O.S.)
Computer. Activate forward viewer.
An image begins to appear on a
VIEW SCREEN
located on one of the "bridge" walls. As the image comes
clear the screen is filled with what appears to be an
extremely large satellite.
There is a loud crash immediately followed by the sound
of fire extinguishers.
INT. WHITE HOUSE OVAL OFFICE - DAY
SUPER: 2 weeks later
PRESIDENT
...would love for you to join us for
dinner next time you are in town. Please
read that last bit back to me.
SECRETARY
The first lady and I would love for you
to join...
There is a knock at the door, then the door opens and the
secretary of defense pokes his head in.
SECRETARY OF DEFENSE
Mr. President, sorry to interrupt, but we
have a situation.
PRESIDENT
(to secretary)
Will you please excuse us?
Secretary leaves and the president motions for the
defense secretary to have a seat.
PRESIDENT (CONT'D)
So, what seems to be the trouble?
SECRETARY OF DEFENSE
Well sir, as you know, two weeks ago
NORAD spotted an unidentified object
leaving the earth's atmosphere and
colliding with the International Space
Station.
PRESIDENT
Yes, I already know that. NASA indicated
the damage was superficial and there
would be no need for a rescue or a repair
trip.
SECRETARY OF DEFENSE
That's correct, sir. However, many
nations are now claiming the unidentified
object was a missile which we fired at
the station.
PRESIDENT
Why would we do that? We were the largest
contributor to that project, we certainly
don't want to destroy it.
SECRETARY OF DEFENSE
Russia and China are apparently
conducting several scientific experiments
aboard the station. And Russia claims
that their cosmonauts saw an American
Flag on the outside of whatever crashed
into the station.
EXT. DESERT - LATER
Peter walks along the highway, the case under his arm. He
looks surprisingly refreshed for having spent that past
two weeks walking through the desert.
As Peter nears a
CACTUS
a rattlesnake strikes from the shadows. Without
missing a step, Peter grabs the snake before it
bites. He then crushes the snakes head in his hand
and tosses the snake aside.
