Not sure if I'm allowed to post things like this up. If not, moderators can remove it as quickly as they like and I apologize for any rule-breaking.
Anyway, I'll keep it short and to the point in this post. Basically, after hanging around many screenwriting forums for the better half of a year...
Hi Dylan,
I'll be brutally honest with you and say this is a complete mess in terms of format, writing and story. Sorry man, but you've got a lot of work ahead of you if you want to get this one cleaned up. I understand that you were unable to post this in the correct format due to forum...
Hey there,
I'm willing to give you a read on the first ten pages if you like.
I think most people here will be more receptive if you give them more details on the script. For example, it would be nice to have a logline so we can get some sort of idea on the story we are about to read??
Dan
1)Know your story like the back of your hand. You're bound to encounter problems while writing anyway and you need to know your story to get across those bridges quickly and effectively.
2)Have a schedule and stick to it. Half a page a day is still progress.
3)Don't hang around for too long. Get...
Is that a New Zealand accent I hear? Greetings from Invercargill, mate. How are ya?
I quite liked this. I got a little lost in the narration a bit, but the visuals made up for that. Overall, a good job.
Cheers,
Dan
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