TheAnthonyYa
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I wrote this script for a video I want to make, based on an idea I had (basically my friend Alberto eats Cheerios like three times a day so I thought of this.) Any thoughts? Or any way to execute it better? Personally I really like the last scene with Alberto and the doctor talking, but I'm iffy on the rest.
http://www.text-upload.com/read.php?id=127695&c=5397793
A little bit of information needed to understand the script like how it would be made:
*It would be very fast-paced dialogue, like 30 Rock (especially the hospital scenes).
*Each scene finishes off the previous scene. I don't know how to explain it but I hope you guys get what I mean. When they're talking, the next scene continues off the previous scene's sentence.
Well thank you all for any help with this!
http://www.text-upload.com/read.php?id=127695&c=5397793
A little bit of information needed to understand the script like how it would be made:
*It would be very fast-paced dialogue, like 30 Rock (especially the hospital scenes).
*Each scene finishes off the previous scene. I don't know how to explain it but I hope you guys get what I mean. When they're talking, the next scene continues off the previous scene's sentence.
Well thank you all for any help with this!
