My storyline: check it out n give ur reviews.

[casper2289]

Hi...guys..here is my story line for a new screen play. have a look and just let me know how was it and what should me the changes. Cheers!!!!


This is a story set in 1947 when India got independence and Bengal was divided into two parts. In West Bengal in a remote village lived a muslim family. One night the Hindu extremists raided their home. Everyone was killed except for one little girl. As she was the only survivor and now it was up to a family friend to take her across the border where her grandparents lived. Incidentally this family friend was a priest who lived in the village church.
So the journey began from their native village in West Bengal to East Pakistan. Throughout the journey they are chased by Hindu extremists who are out to kill the little girl. However the priest and the girl meet various people on their journey and they help them to escape. These people are: an old woman who domesticates several injured animals, a middle-aged self confessed “tantrik”, a fisherman who transforms to a dacoit every night, a young widow who cannot talk and a conservative Hindu soldier. With the help of these five people the priest managed to bring the little girl to East Pakistan to her grandparents. There he started a school for the children of the village. The little girl grew up to become an immigrant lawyer

 

[temerson]

It definitely sounds like an interesting story, and a part of history that has not been examined in Western film. I'm curious how you intend to make it different from your typical adventure/escape story. Definitely see a couple of movies in this genre and think of new ways to approach it. For instance, in "Pan's Labyrinth," the story and events of Franco's Spain during World War II were told from the perspective of the little girl -- hence the fantastical take on it.

As I said, you have piqued my curiosity about the place and the history, but as far as the story goes, you have given me some interesting characters, and not a story, per se. Talk about the specifics of your story, and come up with an interesting way, the "how," to tell your story.

 

[jodymichelle]

cheers for sharing your storyline

cheers for sharing your storyline

Cheers for sharing your storyline. Love the emoticon.

In its barest bones, if i'm reading it right, your storyline is:
Does the girl succeed in escaping and survive in the end?

Your story's ending, which is your answer to your storyline is:
Yes.

Are you going for feature length?

Are there sub-plots tied in with the storyline? For example, why is it important that she succeed in escaping and surviving in the end? Of course this is a human being that you want to keep alive, but are there other significances to keeping her alive that will have causes and effects on other significant things? Having these kinds of elements might be the kinds of things that may or may not get audiences at the edges of their seats every time she almost doesn't make it through. ... Then again, plain circumstance alone of simply needing to escape and survive is not necessarily simple at all, can be serious without any extra stuff. However, it's about having the elements that will entertain, inspire and provoke thought, laughter, tears, and everything in between.

 

[casper2289]

Thank you so much for ur remarks....meant quite a lot to me!!!!!:mrgreen:

 

[Tegan]

This sounds very cool!

I holted when I read "Hindu extremists who are out to kill the little girl." You need to elaborate on this, I'm not buying it for an instant. Why exactly are Hindu extremists out to kill a little girl? This could play into the subplot that jodymichelle suggested -- is there any importance to this particular child?


Tegan