Recent content by Muse

I know where your coming from, I know you're not attacking my work but given me constructive criticism, I applaud that especially taking the time to read my short. I think this could do with another re-write but explaining the main character's schizophrenia is a challenge as it is knowing you...

I know you couldn't pick up on it, but all the signs are their of him being mentally unwell. David gets the glove from the costume shop, hence why there is no money left in his wallet. Little things you may have missed out are important in this characters development. David doesn't meet...

Yeah I went back and proof read it just after posting it then I re-written it and posted it back up, I think you read the first update just before I proof read it. hahaha that made me laugh when I read that back aswell, I was like WTF? lol Page 4 is a flashback, it's something he did before he...

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Thanks, I'm currently re-writing this at the moment, a new beginning and also be re-writing some of the other scenes. Cheers for the criticism though. It can only get better right? lol I'm gonna try and do this on my own, I get more satisfaction out of it that way if it gets a better review...

I beg to differ on the remark it's just 20 minutes if trying to make us jump, the first murder doesn't take place till practically the end of the 7th Page. I agree that this screenplay may need some more re-drafts (currently under way at this point, going into greater depth with the...

If you're interested in putting it into production, can you PM me with any of your work you've done, I'm just looking for someone with a decent camera and a normal camcorder (for the psychopaths recordings) for this to be filmed, some good actors, and a creative film maker to transcribe the...

Cheers, I like writing disturbing Horror's rather than boring slasher :) Thanks for reading it cybersarge. Have you made many shorts before?

Don't let the plot outline make you stop reading it, that's just the plot, the story is actually twisted and the scene's are quite entertaining. If anyone has had a read, please leave a comment. Cheers.

Don't let the plot outline make you stop reading it, that's just the plot, the story is actually twisted and the scene's are quite entertaining. If anyone has had a read, please leave a comment. Cheers.

Hey I'm new to the forum, a friend of mine referred me to here as I'm looking for a FilmMaker to make my original short. I'm also currently writing an original feature, and I'm roughly 60 pages through it. Title: Dead End Street (Working Title) Length: 28 Pages Long Genre: Horror Written...

Hey I'm new to the forum, a friend of mine referred me to here as I'm looking for a FilmMaker to make my original short. I'm also currently writing an original feature, and I'm roughly 60 pages through it. Title: Dead End Street (Working Title) Length: 28 Pages Long Genre: Horror Written...