Need Proof Reading and Feedback

[SsoharFS]

Hey,

This is my first time writing a screenplay. I'm working on this project for school and I'm needing someone who's experienced to comment and give feedback.
I can feel there's something missing in it like a spark hmmm....
I'd muchly appreciate your time and help.

it's very short here's the
SYNOPSIS: Two investigators get caught up in a criminal conspiracy. When one discovers their partner is involved in criminal activities, what will they do? With a dangerous criminal on the loose, wreaking havoc, their discovery leads to shocking events which will soon become a race against time and a fight for survival.

If you'd like to receive a copy I'll email it to you.

Thanks.

 

[Darkdeity9194]

I'm interested in helping you out with your screenplay. Drop me a PM and we can go from there.

 

[Frances Beckham]

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I do a lot of critiques. I you would like to see an example I would be glad to send you a copy.

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Frances