Feedback for my Film

[EOIN]

Hey all, I made this short film during the summer and haven't really been able to get any impartial feedback on it. Here's a link to a page where you can download a view my film Sound Asleep.

It would be great if I could get some feedback about the film.

(Also if this thread should be in another part of the forums could the moderator move it there and tell me where it is. As you can tell by my post count I am a newbie after all)

 

[felixthacatt4]

your film...

your film...

very abstract but i think i got what you were trying to say. Media has a good grasp on the minds of teens as well as everyone else. without it, we wouldn't know what to do. am i close?

 

[EOIN]

I hadn't really thought of it that way felix. Infact the original intention was to make a film that wasn't trying to make some sort of social statement. The use of the TV in the film was more important as a sound source to help define the cuts back to the real world from the dream world. No subversive dig at the media was intended by it. But I can see how it could be read that way.

 

[Guest]

I like it

I like it

Is this your first? Good work. I like many things about this but most of all I like that it kept moving at a good steady pace. I find I am a bit bored with some new filmmakers films because they don't move with any kind of beat. I like the fade in to the establishig shot in the beggning. I like the fade into the music from the beat of the fan blades and how iyou started the music under the wind generators and I found this to be somewhat of the start of the climatic part of the piece for me. I would have liked more music at that point but that is me. Keep doing more and post them here for us to see and hear this is good and I enjoyed it. I think one aera you need to work on is the credits for this. They were blury. Also, i woke up this morning with my eyes bothering me and the sound of his eyes during REM was erking me a little! :shock:

maybe we should create a feedback section?

Truly
Kim

 

[EOIN]

thanks for you're reply.. I know what you mean about the credits. They don't jitter as harshly as that in the non compressed version but I think it was just a problem with the way I exported the images from photoshop and importeded them into final cut. Won't be able to make any more for the foreseeable future (finished college in august and no access to proper equipment).

If you're interested in how it was made there's a copy of the dissertation I handed up about the film on that page also.. Probably the most interesting essay is the second one about the use of dreams in film.

 

[Reminiscence]

Feedback for my Film

Loved it!!! Can´t wait till the next film. Sure it will get better and better... 8)

Regards
Reminiscence

 

[Adam Rench]

I know this is a little late to be posting, but hopefully you are still viewing this forum.

I also liked the pace of it. Very good for a first film. Some of the criticism that I got on my first film was that it was too long. Alexander McKendrick's handouts are in a book called "On filmmaking" and he says, Student films are three sizes, too long, much too long, and WAY too long (or something like that). I'm guilty of doing the same thing. If you cut it down a tad, do some more cutting in post, you will get a movie that is about half as long, but is much more gripping.

I liked your creative edits and how you were able to move from scene to scene and how you used the TV and the real elements to motivate his dream. I laughed pretty good at the vibrating phone too. That was extremely creative and had a great touch!

Good job. also, you can keep making films even though you are leaving film school! Just pick up a small camcorder and start filming! Or post an ad on craiglist or Mandy looking for equipment. In exchange you can offer someone experience! Just a thought.

keep it up. don't stop making films. You have a good knack for it.

 

[EOIN]

Not too late at all Rench.. Thanks for you're reply.. I've started working now so hopefully in a few months I'll be able to get a good PC or Mac (Still can't decide between Avid or Final Cut) and hopefully try to come up with a few more shorts.

I know what you mean about lenght in student films and it was something I was very consious of when creating the film. Its as 8 minute long film but it has 8 seperate scenes. But even at that there are still some that feel a bit flabby to me. I think if you're gonna make a short film based an a single topic in a single location you need to work real hard to maintin people's interest, and that's not pandering to the audience, thats good film making IMHO