Goodness, it is wonderful and amazing that people actually DO take the time to cretique screenplays for random strangers. . . wonder if they'll do it for a 30+ page screenplay? It is written by me and a friend.
The film is called Glass. Two things:
1) How are the characters and story in general?
2) We need to make the screenplay more applicable to the general public. We don't like making film for the sake of art or ourselves, we make film for the general audience, that being eventually Hollywood. So, right now our film is still a bit artsy, and we need suggestions for a bit of (not cliche) Hollywoodization.
The link is:
http://www.box.net/shared/tlf4qq9502
Thanks!
The film is called Glass. Two things:
1) How are the characters and story in general?
2) We need to make the screenplay more applicable to the general public. We don't like making film for the sake of art or ourselves, we make film for the general audience, that being eventually Hollywood. So, right now our film is still a bit artsy, and we need suggestions for a bit of (not cliche) Hollywoodization.
The link is:
http://www.box.net/shared/tlf4qq9502
Thanks!
